I had a hard time deciding what to post this week for Six Sentence Sunday, since there were several snippets I thought might be fun. I finally decided on this one, where Shelby tries to figure out her attraction to Det. Ryan Nichols:
Ryan had on a dark blue polo shirt, unbuttoned at the throat, taunting me to investigate further. The ribbed sleeves gripped his tanned upper arms, the way I wanted to, but I was worried about him getting a restraining order if I did. He wore some pleated khakis that enjoyed being on his body, judging by the way they hugged his backside.
I sipped my dark roast brew, although I should have asked for iced coffee, just to cool my overactive libido. Why was he affecting me so much? It felt like I'd gotten stuck in the middle of my lust cycle, one I didn't even know I had.
Lust cycle? Is that like a rinse cycle, lol. Great six, Donna.
I love your descriptions, especially of his pants and their enjoyment of his backside, lol.
Posted by: TempesteO | April 15, 2012 at 02:26 AM
TempesteO -- that's exactly what I had in mind for the lust cycle. LOL Thanks for the compliments. I'm glad you liked it. :)
Posted by: Donna Cummings | April 15, 2012 at 07:28 AM
Have I mentioned that I love your writing? I mean really, I LOVE your writing! Hugging khakis and the unknown lust cycle are brilliant. :)
Posted by: Kate Warren | April 15, 2012 at 08:27 AM
Nice! I love the line about the khakis enjoying being on his body. Brilliant!
Posted by: Tonya Burrows | April 15, 2012 at 08:33 AM
Kate, thanks so much! Let me just clear out a space here next to the laptop, so you can whisper those sweet things in my ear when the muse is being cranky. LOL
Posted by: Donna Cummings | April 15, 2012 at 08:37 AM
Tonya, I'm glad you like it -- I kinda like visualizing those khakis. LOL
Posted by: Donna Cummings | April 15, 2012 at 08:38 AM
I can see exactly why she is attracted to him... I mean, I've only read six sentences and I'M attracted to him :) Tantalizing six!
Posted by: Jenny Hickman | April 15, 2012 at 09:03 AM
Another great six! I'm with all the comments -- love that line about the khakis and the lust-cycle. Have I told you I want to read this book? I must have but I'll say it again...I WANT TO READ THIS BOOK! LOL
Posted by: Melissa | April 15, 2012 at 09:03 AM
LOL, Jenny. Thanks so much. I'm a bit partial to Det. Nichols myself. We'll have to fight Shelby for him.
Posted by: Donna Cummings | April 15, 2012 at 09:09 AM
Melissa, no worries -- I can hook you up with this book. LOL You've been so wonderful about reviewing my self-pubbed stories, so I'd love to see what you have to say about this one. :)
Posted by: Donna Cummings | April 15, 2012 at 09:12 AM
Another awesome 6 Donna! Just love her voice and how she describes things--each bit, from the restraining order, to the khakis to the lust cycle!
Do you need any Beta readers for this? Can't wait to read the whole thing!
Posted by: Angela Quarles | April 15, 2012 at 09:59 AM
I really like the description of his clothes--unusual and innovative. Great six!
Posted by: Linda Morris | April 15, 2012 at 10:13 AM
LOL. You have great imagery in these six. He sounds yummy. And I loved the last line. :)
Posted by: Lorraine Paton | April 15, 2012 at 10:43 AM
Like the idea of a lust cycle!
Posted by: Paula Martin | April 15, 2012 at 10:48 AM
Ha! Coffee is a common theme this week. (Like I should be surprised, right?) Donna, your humor shines so brightly in your writing. Love this snippet! It's hard to be funny and still convey a real sense of the characters. You do it, girl!
Posted by: Silver James | April 15, 2012 at 12:15 PM
I absolutely loved your libido line! Fantastic. Your honesty with the descriptions made me smile.
Posted by: Wildcats Wife | April 15, 2012 at 01:42 PM
Angela, thanks -- and I may take you up on the beta read. I'm getting ready to self-pub this, so I'd love to have your opinion on the entire thing. :)
Posted by: Donna Cummings | April 15, 2012 at 03:03 PM
Linda -- thanks. I'm glad to hear you like it.
Lorraine -- I think he's yummy too. I'm happy that you think so too. :)
Paula -- the lust cycle explains SO much. LOL
Posted by: Donna Cummings | April 15, 2012 at 03:05 PM
LOL, Silver -- yes, coffee is usually a part of my character's lives. And thanks for the kind words. I really appreciate it!
Posted by: Donna Cummings | April 15, 2012 at 03:06 PM
Wildcat's Wife -- I'm glad my snippet made you smile! Thanks for coming by.
Posted by: Donna Cummings | April 15, 2012 at 03:08 PM
lol, fab snippet!
Posted by: Gayle Ramage | April 17, 2012 at 08:03 AM
Gayle, thanks so much!
Posted by: Donna Cummings | April 17, 2012 at 10:14 AM